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27 August 2010 @ 11:13 pm
Slumber Party (A Snippet of "The Cleaphytes - Book 1")  
So, I might delete this come tomorrow, but this is what I've written tonight and I've been wanting to share a snippet for so long. Never feeling quite sure about what will grab you, never sure of what will be quality enough for you.... but my inhibitions are low right now and so I'm doing it. There's a startling amount before and after it, but here's the snippet (which may disappear come tomorrow so hopefully you're up right now reading it....)

Chapter Title (tentatively) "Slumber Party" (Notice: It starts from Teagan's POV)

P.S. Please excuse the errors, this hasn't been reviewed and edited AT ALL!


-Bryce-



When I got home my dad was playing with Déjà outback, which let me know Teagan was here, even though her truck wasn’t. And when I reached the second floor I could hear music spilling out of Brynn’s room so I knocked. They must not have heard me so I let myself in.

I found them dressed in frilly skirts with mismatching tops and large party hats. They danced together in front of Brynn’s mirror, twirling the beads that hung around their necks in their fingers, singing along to the music like little girls. My God, it was adorable. I leaned against the door frame and just watched, incapable of hiding the smile I felt across my face.

When they finally noticed me standing there Teagan’s cheeks were bright pink, and Brynn tugged me into the dance. The three of us danced in this circle like it was completely normal, like there was a party going on around us or something. Teagan smiled at me like we hadn’t just spent most of the week apart, like nothing awkward had ever happened between us last weekend and somehow I wanted to believe it hadn’t.

The song changed and Brynn’s eyes popped open with an idea. “Hey, go get your camera! Take pictures of us.”

Teagan looked embarrassed over the idea, but Brynn pushed me towards the door. I returned to find them posing in front of the mirror, switching hats and adding more gaudy jewelry to their ensembles. I took pictures of them for at least an hour. After so many frames they’d disappear into the closet and return in a new funky outfit ready for more. Watching them giggle like school girls had me smiling the entire time and the pictures I was capturing of them were impeccable. Ones I knew they’d both really enjoy when they were finished playing ‘dress up’.

Eventually Teagan started to get tired, yawning trying to keep up with Brynn’s zealous energy. Apparently they’d been dancing and playing in Brynn’s closet for hours before I got there. She flopped down on the couch and said to Brynn, “I think I’m done. Can we get in our pajamas now and watch a movie or something?”

Brynn flopped down beside her, still hyper and sighed, “Yeah, I guess.”

Surprised by the mention of pajamas I asked, “You’re spending the night?”

Brynn leaned forward to look past Teagan and smirked at me, “Yup, we’re having a slumber party! You wanna watch a movie with us?”

I looked at Teagan to see if she minded, she said, “Yeah, you should join us!”

Oh, exciting. My heart started jumping in my chest at the fact that Teagan would be sleeping here, at my house in her pajamas and I’d be watching a movie with them. I escaped to my room to change while they did. When I returned they were setting up a giant pile of blankets and pillows on the floor in front of the TV.

Teagan sprawled out in the center of the blanket on her belly while Brynn picked out a movie and got it started. I lay down on my stomach beside her. She looked so soft in pajamas. I wanted to scoop her up and cuddle her so bad it was ridiculous. She was blushing, for what reason I wasn’t sure, and she said, “Can you believe I’ve never been to a slumber party before?”

Brynn spoke before I could reply, “But you’re enjoying it so far, right?”

She giggled, “Of course!”

Brynn was about to hit play and lay down on the other side of Teagan when she startled us both and said, “Oh! I’m going to see if we have any popcorn. Be right back.”

Once she was gone Teagan let out of an exhausted sigh, “Man, she’s hard to keep up with. Where does all of that energy come from?”

I laughed, knowing all too well how Brynn can be and exactly where all of our energy comes from. I’m just better at taming it than her. “She’s never been to a slumber party either so I imagine she’s pretty excited your staying the night.” I didn’t mention that I was too.

She smiled like she enjoyed knowing she wasn’t the only girl her age who had managed to miss out on such things. To kill the time until Brynn returned I pulled the camera off of the coffee table and wiggled a little closer to her, the warmth from her shoulder bleeding into me, the smell of her hair enticing my nose. Teagan’s smile matched her smile in the pictures as we glanced through them. She was visibly happy and it seemed like she liked seeing herself that way. She pointed out her favorites and I mentally took note of mine.

By the time we’d reached the last photo Brynn burst through the door with popcorn, sodas, and Déjà in tow. He licked Teagan in the face and sniffed at mine as he passed us, and then sauntered over to the vacant couch and made himself comfortable. Brynn passed out her goodies, turned off the lights and started the film.

Three quarters of the way through the movie Teagan’s head fell from her hands and onto the pillow facing me. She was knocked out, her breathing slow and deep. I laid my head in my arms and just stared at her smiling. Her face was so peaceful, so close to mine. This was so much better than all of the times she’d fallen asleep on my shoulder, but far harder not to wrap myself around her. She seemed so cozy and inviting. Brynn popped up on her elbow on the other side of her and whispered, “She asleep?”

I nodded with my finger over my lips so she didn’t wake her. She grinned at me and went back to the movie. She knew I’d be happy with this; it’s probably why she invited me to watch the movie. I could lay here and watch her sleep forever. And I did, long after the movie had ended and Brynn had passed out too. When my own eyelids started to feel heavy I knew I’d better head to bed. I can’t imagine how she’d react if she woke up laying next to me, or if I’d be able to keep my hands to myself in my sleep knowing she was beside me, especially after how things went down last weekend. It was better that I leave now.

I tucked the blankets around my sister and then Teagan and just as I was leaving her eyes shot open, her hand stretching out where I had just been in a panicked search. She looked up at me in the doorway and frowned. She whispered, “Where are you going?”

In an effort to not wake Brynn I squatted down beside her to whisper, “I just thought that… I mean after last weekend, I figured I should go sleep in my own bed.”

She tugged on my arm, shaking her head no like she wanted me to lie back down. “Stay.”

Confused, but obviously willing, I laid back down beside her with a decent gap between us just in case I was reading her wrong. My heart rate skyrocketed though, a wave of excitement and worry tore through me. I wondered what was going on.

We lay there facing each other for a few minutes and Teagan’s eyes were heavy with sleep. Unexpectedly, she wove her fingers through mine rubbing her thumb against the back of my hand. She whispered, “I missed you so much this week Bryce. I’m sorry about last weekend and for being so…” but she never finished the sentence. Her eyelids started to fall, incapable of fighting sleep any longer.

I whispered, “I missed you too, a lot,” not really sure if she even heard me.

I had been so tired just a few minutes ago, but I couldn’t tame my pulse now. I couldn’t figure out why she was suddenly so okay with me laying beside her, or holding my hand like this for that matter. I didn’t want to question it because it felt so perfect, but if last weekend taught me anything it was to be weary with her. I was so elated at the moment though that she wanted me here, that she put her hand in mine, that I couldn’t rationalize the possible consequences.

I stared at her for quite some time after that, until I too couldn’t fight the urge to let my eyelids close and just before I did she pulled our hands into her chest forcing me to close the gap between us. She buried her face into my chest and cooed happily in her sleep as she draped her arm around me. I wrapped mine around her too and just hoped when morning came it wouldn’t be a repeat of last weekend.
 
 
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Heather: Heartedgyauthor on August 28th, 2010 04:36 am (UTC)
Teagan and Bryce are SO CUTE. Seriously. I'm loving them already.

Also, for something completely unedited, there weren't that many errors. (Just silly things like your/you're that all writers goof up on.)

Anyway, this was such a fun snippet! I love the innocence in it, and I'm now looking forward to reading this book even more than before. :)
swhistedswhisted on August 28th, 2010 04:48 am (UTC)
Awe, really?

I try not to need coaxing, but I'll be honest your comment makes me feel ten times more confident. I respect your opinion greatly in case you haven't noticed. I know there are dumb errors like you mentioned, but hopefully they're not so large to take away from the point at large.

And I'm glad you enjoy the innocence of it. If you only knew what happened "last weekend" you'd probably be thinking... Whoa, big move for Teagan... Last weekend, just so you know, was a disaster. It was all of their birthday's (because Brynn and Bryce are twins and share the same birthday coincidentally with Teagan) and well bad things happen all around.... you'll understand when you finally read it all....

WHICH... YAY!!!! I'm excited that you actually want to read it more now. Especially on something so simple and not fantasy based at all about the story.

As much as I really want it to be finished so I can give it to you, I'm equally as nervous. But you saying this, makes me more eager to get to the giving part.

Maybe I won't delete this post tomorrow....

Maybe.

Thanks Heather, seriously. You're a huge confidence booster, whether it was intended or not.
Heatheredgyauthor on August 28th, 2010 05:24 am (UTC)
Your errors are far from large, unlike mine, which would make your eyes bleed, haha. Seriously. I'll be writing so fast, sometimes whole lines are accidentally left unwritten. And then there are the times where my brain "combines" words without me knowing on paper. (A phrase like "Betty lied" could easily turn into "butterflies," for example. I drive myself crazy trying to edit my writing sometimes!)

And I figured that that weekend was disastrous in some way. It's one of the reasons why I want to read your book more--so I can find out exactly what that disaster was. ;)

And never underestimate my love of non-fantasy bits. It's fun seeing them in fantasies, because then it feels like the fantastical stuff could actually happen in our day-to-day lives.

Also, I'm just as nervous about having my own book read, so at least you'll be sharing yours with a fellow basket-case. :P
swhistedswhisted on August 28th, 2010 11:32 pm (UTC)
I know what you mean about leaving out whole lines sometimes or merging words into something that totally doesn't fit. My mom pretty much reads everything as I write it and often times I'll ship it off to her late at night without giving it a once over and she'll ask me the next day, "What the heck was this supposed to be?" Haha.

I like when the worlds blend and you almost forget it's a fantasy, like those "creatures" are really just humans you or I could know. It's my favorite part about it.
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swhistedswhisted on August 28th, 2010 11:36 pm (UTC)
LOL @ torturing you. Come on Shelby, you know it's not my intent, but I have to admit I like that you seem so eager to know more ;)

Thank you for loving it. You know how nervous I was to post a snippet so I'm glad it received a good reception ;)

Bryce being your new character crush = awesome! I've had a crush on him myself for over a year now, always more than all of the other guys I fall for in books.
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swhistedswhisted on August 29th, 2010 01:04 am (UTC)
Sadist? Me? No.... ;)

Thank you again Shelby, you're one of those supportive friends and sometimes I don't know what I'd do without all of my writer buddies.

gracious_annegracious_anne on August 28th, 2010 12:42 pm (UTC)
What happened last weekend? I wanna know now. (I know how these things go...you give us happy teenagers and that they make bad decisions and it's all RUINED...but so much fun for the reader.)

And I second Heather's "Teagan and Bryce are cute." That was a sweet moment.
swhistedswhisted on August 28th, 2010 11:43 pm (UTC)
I can't completely divulge, but I will say it was ab important date that started out bad, got excitingly hot, and then took a dive to hell. Teagan's a difficult one (which is partially understandable once you know her).

BTW, I'm shooting for a YA audience, but my cast just turned 21. They aren't average 21 year olds though, never having friends or dating or any of the things (like slumber parties), that most teenagers do. I'm hoping 21 will make the YA cut considering how innocent they still are.

I'm glad you think they're cute because I LOVE them too. Thanks for liking this enough to want to know more. Its making me feel a lot more confident with everyone enjoying it the way they did.